Welcome to Snippet Sunday! It’s the weekly event when authors post 8 to 10 lines of things they are writing, editing, querying, or for which they’re obsessively checking sales figures! You can find the other snippets HERE.
This week I’m continuing with my fantasy WIP. Nathan recalls the first time he meets Kavi.
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“I’m Kavi. Thank you for opening your home to a stranger,” he said, holding out his hand. Nathan blinked, losing his voice in a tide of yearning. He’d never seen a Karthagan before. Kavi was breathtaking, slim, strong. Black hair fell like silk to his shoulders. Dark gems for eyes, intelligent, kind. Nathan’s lonely heart reached for him, wanting the man for his own.
The Magus’s soft laugh recalled him and he stammered through his greetings, blood rushing at the strength in Kavi’s slim fingers. His heart pounded. Nathan felt awkward, callow, embarrassed by his poverty. He wished they hadn’t come. His solitary life had left him ill equipped for the longing that swept him. Kavi’s full lips lifted in a knowing smile and Nathan dropped his gaze, mortified by emotions he didn’t know how to control.
Dianne Hartsock 
I got so caught up in the emotions in this snippet. I really, really, really can’t wait to read this!
Thanks PT! You always make me smile with your comments. 🙂
Wonderful emotions shown here as he recalls their first meeting. Great snippet!!
I really enjoy writing about these two, Karen. 🙂
Oh my, he’s in so much trouble. Great snippet, Dianne. 🙂
Yes he is Siobhan! This has only just started for him. 🙂
Super emotional! Well done.
Thanks Elaine! That’s what I was trying for. 🙂
Very effective scene. You’re pulling the right emotional strings here.
I’m glad you liked it! It’s sometimes hard to find just the right words to use. 🙂
I like the last sentence. It’s a very nice conclusion to this emotional passage.
Thank you Linda. It’s all very confusing for him.